is this resume ok? can you give me some feedback?
Im 17 years old and im looking for employment just somewhere simple that any kid in highschool would work.this is the first resume i’ve ever written and i was just looking for some feedback and advice for areas of improvement. basically what i want to know is if you were a hiring manager and you looked over my resume would you call me in for an interview? . i recently graduated from the washington youth academy. (military school funded by the national guard) thats what alot of the stuff here is revolved around. here is my resume. alot of the font size, boldness and positioning is different than it actually is on microsoft word
Nathanael Blaine Wilson
55555 SE 5nd ST
Somewhere, WA 55555
(555)-555-555
nathanael_wilson@yahoo.com
Objective
Pursue entry level employment in culinary arts, retail, customer service and business management.
Summary of Qualifications
•Food handlers’ permit
•Basic First Aid/CPR certified
•Basic math skills
•Social/communication skills
•Able to carry more than 75 pounds
•Able to stand for hours at a time
•Works well with others and alone
•Optimistic and outgoing
•Motivated team worker
Work Experience
5/20/08 – 8/19/08
Landscaper, Arabian Horse Ranch
Duties performed: lawn mowing, weed whacking, raking, weeding, trimming, leveling gravel road, stacking hay, feeding horses, cleaning horse stalls and other tasks required.
11/1/08 – 2/11/08
Construction Worker/ Excavator, Krotzer Fencing
Duties performed: Constructing structure roofs, floors, walls and fences, measuring and cutting lumber as needed for building structures, clearing forest vegetation, digging ditches and post holes, constructing fences, clearing forests, digging ditches and post holes, removing large trees and roots.
5/19/11 – 6/18/11
Kitchen Patrol, Washington Youth Academy
Duties performed: Working on an 8 man team to serve breakfast to 116 cadets, staff and cadre between 0645 and 0720 each day, wash dishes, clean pots and pans, maintain hygiene of the DFAC dining room and kitchen, refill napkins, condiments and silverware, assisting cooks with any other required duties between 0600 to 0800.
Education
February 2010 – January 2011
Kentridge High School
Public High School
September 2009 – January 2010
Graham Kapowsin High school
Public High School
January 15, 2011 – June 18, 2011
Washington Youth Academy
Quasi-Military Leadership Academy
Volunteer Experience
While enrolled at the Washington Youth Academy I performed over 40 hours of service to the community in various ways such as the following:
•Improving trails at national parks and forests
•Planting vegetation at national parks and forests
•Helping staff at the Boys and Girls Club of America in Bremerton
•Clearing unwanted or overgrown vegetation at various places
•Feeding and helping homeless with the Salvation Army
•Improving cleanliness and organization of storage at the Salvation Army
•Improving libraries and elementary schools in Bremerton
•Cleaning up and recycling trash at various places
•Donating Blood
Awards, Honors and Scholarships
•Student of the Semester Award 2009 by Ferrucci Jr. High School
•Promoted to the rank of Team Leader or Cadet Staff Sergeant 1/30/11
•Promoted to the rank of Squad Leader or Cadet Sergeant First Class 2/13/11
•Promoted to the rank of Platoon Sergeant or Cadet Master Sergeant 2/27/11
•Promoted to the rank of Platoon Leader or Cadet 1st Lieutenant 3/13/11
•Awarded Cadet of the Month at the Washington Youth Academy for the month of March 2011
•Achieved Academic Excellence Award 3/24/11
•Achieved Academic Excellence Award 4/22/11
•Promoted to KP (Kitchen Patrol) Leader 6/3/11
Activities and Interests
•Construction
•Culinary arts
•Hiking/Camping
•Rock climbing/Repelling
•Physical fitness
•Performing arts
References
•Jane Doe (555)-555-5555
•John Doe (555)-555-5555
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2 Responses to “is this resume ok? can you give me some feedback?”
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It’s a really good start, but I would make a few suggestions:
1) You don’t need to list references on a resume; take them to the interview and provide them if you are asked for them.
2) You have a lot of information on here; most hiring managers will not spend a lot of time looking at your resume so less is more provided you effectively highlight your skills. Make sure it fits on one page. I would probably leave out the activities and interests section entirely or cut it down to no more that 3 or 4 bullet points. Likewise, your volunteer experience and “honors” sections should be cut down significantly or you could list “a variety of volunteer experience” as one bullet point under the heading “summary of qualifications.”
3) Finally, I would change your objective statement to say, “Pursue entry level employment in culinary arts, retail, customer service OR business management” (although you should obviously make OR lowercase). You should say “or” instead of “and” because I’m assuming you want a job in one of these fields, not all of them at the same time.
Good luck!
Looks way better than my resume at age 17 I tell you that. Here are some suggestions
Make your experience description in bullet points similiar to your volunteer and interests. Use action verbs like initiated, lead, pursued.. words that show you are proactive.
For example:
Construction:
- Activity 1 (construction of roofs, floor, ….)
- Activity 2 (cleared forest vegetation….)
- Responsiblity 1 (list if you had any)
- Projects finished 1 (cleared entire section of forest, finished an entire house.. etc..)
Do this for each place you have worked.
Also, make sure you list your most recent experience at the top because employers will want to see them first.
The lines about able to stand for hours, work well alone or with others, motivated, etc.. You can remove them and put it a cover page if you have one. Because they sound cheezy and the fact that EVERYONE says that. Most employers don’t even read them.
Your objective should be focused. Not bus management, or culinery arts, or retail. Pick one depending on your employer, you should focus on one. This way your resume will seem more directed at the position, rather than a generic resume that you mass produce.